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Jack Jaeger
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 |  Subject: Raiden Maru  Mon Aug 16, 2010 4:50 am | |
| Name: Raiden Maru Alias: Age: 21 Gender: Male Height: 5'8'' Weight: 145 lbs Appearance: Raiden is a slender man with long black hair and pale skin. He has tattoo's covering most of his body. His teeth are sharp and his eyes are a blood red. - Spoiler:
Race: Japanese Hair: Black Eyes: Red Body: Slender Ethnicity: Konohagakure Personality: Raiden has a sick sense of humor. He is sadistic, malicious, and all around a bad person. He hates most people and would do anything to get back at a person who has hurt him. If it mean't hurting someone who had hurt him he would go so far as take his own life. Raiden loves to fight, training day and night to become the best shinobi the world has ever seen. His dream in life is to take over Konoha once the Hokage resigns and rule with an iron fist. Recently however he has shown a nicer side as it is hard to rule those who hate you. He has been working in teams and training those weaker than him as long as they work under the Village Leaf. Village: Konohagakure Title: Jounin Special Titles: Sannin Missing Ninja Class:
Karma:
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Renown: 1,500
Rank: S Experience Points: 1,500 Bloodline:Element: Doton (Earth), Futon (Wind). Fighting Type/Style: Genjutsu Mastery, Ninjutsu Secondary Sub Fighting style: Genjutsu Master Inventory:
- Pouch of kunai
- Pouch of Shuriken
- Katana
Kekkai Genkai:Combat Styles: Abilities:Bloodline Limits:Jutsu Total: 8 Jutsus:- Spoiler:
Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None
Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance. While it may seem like the user simply appeared or disappeared, the technique is actually a momentary increase in movement speed towards a set location.
Iwa no Yoroi - Stone Armor
Rank:C
Type: Defense
Requirement: Doton as first element.
This technique makes earth-chakra flow through the body, absorbing the properties of stone around the user to form a skin-deep armor that is transparent and is only visible when light reflects off it. Despite encasing the user’s body, the armor has no apparent affect on the user’s speed or agility. The armor is able to defend from all forms of blunt-force trauma. At the same time, it enhances the user's strength for more powerful physical strikes and break free or through restraints and walls. Because this jutsu works by constantly absorbed earth properties, it requires no extra chakra after initiating it, yet still needs a sufficient amount of stone to be performed. While powerful, it is highly absorbent and too much water will eventually affect the user’s mobility and reduce its defensive might. Also if in a muddy terrain, the user’s excess weight can lead to sinking.
Doton: Doryūsō - Earth Release: Rising Stone Spears
Rank: C
Type: Offense
Requirement: none
This technique at the cost of no hand seals,lets the user condense mud or stone, from the ground, and shape them into spikes that will protrude from the ground in order to skewer the target. The spikes cannot penetrate targets of greater density.
Fūton: Jūha Shō - Wind Release: Beast Wave Palm
Rank: C
Type: Offense/Defense
Requirement: none
A strong gathering of chakra in the arm is used to release this technique. It does not require any hand seals and once the person swipes their arm in a horizontal motion a wave of wind-chakra is sent from their arm at a high speed that will slash almost any material. A skilled shinobi would be able to send multiple slashes of the wave in rapid succession.
Souzou Saisei - Genesis of Rebirth
Ranks: S
Type:Support
Requirement: Souzou Saisei used once before to begin technique
This technique is a very useful ability only usable by exceptional Shinobi. It allows the user to offer a great portion of their chakra into a special mark that will appear on their body when the respective hand seals are set into place. The ninja's body will natrually restore chakra once the person is well rested so this technique can be used on numerous times on numerous occasions. It is completely up to the user how much of their own chakra is offered to the mark and the mark has no limit on how much chakra can be stored in it. When the user releases the mark all the chakra stored within the mark will be rushed through the user all at once creating a extra wave of chakra reserves. These reserves will last a maximum of 5 posts and are capable of allowing the user to perform high caliber chakra draining jutsu's without fail or fatigue, instantly heal wounds or severed body tissues to completely revive a person mid fight or provide additional support in tai,nin or genjutsu abilities. When the seal is worn off the user's natural chakra is left near depletion since the jutsu fuses the stored chakra with normal chakra and uses them both at the same time.
Kokuangyou no Jutsu - Bringer Of Darkness
Rank: B
Type: Genjutsu/Support
Requirement: None
By using an strong amount of chakra a user of this technique is able to create a wall of darkness ranging from 50 meters around their opponent. While the darkness is in effect the caster remains undetectable by their opponents and all outside of the wall. The jutsu will last at a maximum 3 posts and will instantly dispel after the third post of it's usage. Shinobi are able to use their presence concealment to perform techniques that may need time to prepare.
Utakata - Ephemeral
Type: Genjutsu - visual
Rank: S
Requirements: None
Description: A high-level genjutsu that gives the user a lot of control over what their target will be seeing. Practically, it gives them full control over the reality of the illusion. In reality, the target will not be moving from the spot, whatever they are experiencing being entirely illusionary and having no reflection in reality. However, this illusion can still be dispelled the same way as most others.
Kokuangyou no Jutsu - Journey into Black Darkness Technique
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: S
Requirements: None
Description: This strong genjutsu completely negates the target's sight, making them unable to see anything but themselves and their clones, the rest is covered in complete darkness. The user is able to act freely while this genjutsu is in effect, making it one of the most powerful illusionary techniques in existence. This genjutsu can be dispelled if the user's chakra flow is disrupted somehow.
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Background: Raiden was born to a small group of shinobi known as the Maru clan. Unfortunately for Raiden this meant years upon years of abuse from his father, a drunk who never made it as a ninja. His mother didn't help ever, instead taking a few beatings herself. One day Raiden's father become so intoxicated and out of his mind that he beat his mother to death, breaking her ribs from kicking her while she was on the ground so much that her ribs had punctured her lung in three different places. Raiden's father, realizing what he had just done, took a kitchen knife and slit his throat, not knowing his son was watching. Raiden was so shocked that he blanked out, not remembering those events to this day. From then on Raiden, who was told of what happened, vowed to kill anyone who tried to hurt him the way his father did. At thirteen he was alone in the world with no relatives or friends who would take him in. He found shelter with the Hokage, who reluctantly took in the poor child as it would look bad if she did not help one of her future shinobi. Raiden trained day in and day out, working as hard as he could to become the best shinobi alive so he could pay his debt to the Hokage. As Raiden did this he killed anyone who stood in his way, beating and destroying anyone and everyone he did not like. That was until the chuunin exams. The written part of the exam was simple for him. He had been studying with the Hokage and had almost no problem on it. It was the second part of the exams that almost got him. During the retrieval of the final scroll he was ambushed and had to fend off three Iwagakure Shinobi as his team fled to hand in the scrolls, using him as a sacrifice which made him hate people even more. He managed to defeat the three, killing them all in the process. On third part of the exam he was put up against yet another Iwagakure shinobi who Raiden took out all of his anger and frustration on, leaving him in a coma by the end of his fight against Raiden that he would never wake up from. There were mixed feelings about Raiden afterwards as he was lethal, yes, but also dangerous to the well-being of the village. Raiden was then assigned to a new team, Team Akuma. For once in his life he was put with shinobi who were similar to him, no parents, extreme strength and military prowess, as well as mental issues. The team was for the most part a success until the day everyone except two, Raiden and Komichi, were killed during a sortie to Amegakure when they were out numbered seventeen to one. Amegakure officials were given notice before hand that Team Akuma were coming. Komichi and Raiden were able to survive by taking the Jounin Commander hostage, only to kill him once they were far enough away. After that Raiden and Komichi became best friends. They loved eachothers company. Until the day Komichi planned a Coup-d'etat to overthrow the Konoha government by killing the Hokage. Raiden had no choice but to kill Komichi and the other three ANBU level shinobi that sided with Komichi. This meant the end of friendships for Raiden. Raiden soon after became secluded, only talking to the Hokage for missions and debriefings. It was only when he was promoted to Jounin that he began working as a team again. Given the special title of Sannin he was loved by the village, despite his questionable acts. He is currently attempting to put together the second Team Akuma, to train and make the next group of shinobi to protect Konoha.
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The Canadian
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 10:32 am | |
| Trashed, you did not wow me. | |
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The Canadian
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 10:54 am | |
| Moved back at user request to be edited. | |
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Lyte
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 11:17 am | |
| You have an extra style point cause you have no bloodline. Just saying. | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 11:24 am | |
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Mitsuomi Sensui
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:33 pm | |
| You do not meet the requirements for these two techniques since Doton is your first element, secondly your ninjutsu is only secondary, you do not have enough points in this one to even begin trying a ninjutsu like these two. - Spoiler:
Fūton: Shinkūha - Wind Release: Vacuum Wave
Rank: B
Type: Offense/Defense
Requirement: Fūton as first element.
The user takes a deep breath and spins his body around while exhaling a large blade of wind so that it covers an angle of about 180 degrees around the user. The resulting blast is large enough to slice through multiple targets, causing great damage. While more than sufficient to cause crippling, if not fatal, damage, it is incapable of cutting all the way through human flesh.
Purazuma Booru - Plasma Ball
Rank:S
Type: Defense/Support
Requirement: Raiton as first element
Using lightning elemented chakra the user is able to create an electric barrier around themselves and comrades if needed. The barrier defends against all oncoming ninjutsu attacks and any taijutsu that comes into contact with the barrier will cost it's user a dreadful shock. The barrier is used to protect oneself and also for stalling in order to prepare a more powerful ninjutsu, the barrier however will not protect the user against genjutsu and will instantly be dispelled if any other jutsu use successfully used by the user. A skilled shinobi would use this technique to prepare any technique that may require time to use, medical ninja would use this technique in battle to heal injured allies without fear of enemy attackers. Once the electric barrier has weakened it takes time for it to recharge (4 posts maximum). The chakra used in the barrier's creation however is minimal.
I'm not sure if they edited the rules but I suppose putting a point in Taijutsu making it a secondary as well with ninjutsu is okay, make the specific changes please. | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:36 pm | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:37 pm | |
| edited again, took away raiton | |
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Lady Chemical
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:38 pm | |
| Well thank you for doing my job Mitsu >.< anyway I think everything seems alright is there anything else you want to add or anything before I finalize
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Lyte
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:43 pm | |
| Yes I have a comment. See how he has no mastery style points? Yeah, that means he CANNOT HAVE ANY S RANK TECHNIQUES. thats how this system works. Youd think the staff would actually know the rules of their own forum, but I guess not. | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:48 pm | |
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Mitsuomi Sensui
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:49 pm | |
| You heard her...S ranks out of the question, get rid of the Taijutsu if you want mastery in Genjutsu | |
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Lyte
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:50 pm | |
| Did you just call me a girl? | |
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Mitsuomi Sensui
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:51 pm | |
| Lol just kidding lad, but you know what I meant I was merely trying to push your buttons | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:53 pm | |
| edited, now can i use the S ranked jutsu? | |
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Lyte
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:54 pm | |
| No, you need to make your style points read like this.
Fighting Type/Style: Genjutsu Mastery, Ninjutsu Secondary
Sub Fighting style: Genjutsu Master
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Ahira
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:56 pm | |
| - Quote :
- You'd think the staff would actually know the rules of their own forum, but I guess not.
I don't think this comment was necessary, but whatever. Finally, I find it highly unlikely that your character is carrying nothing on his person. That's just suicide. Genjutsu master or not, you're screwed if someone breaks your Genjutsu and they come at you ready to bash your face in. Put something in your inventory, even if it's a pouch of kunai. You never know when you're going to need to defend yourself.
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Lady Chemical
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:57 pm | |
| Dammit lyte every time I go to post you or someone else do it >.<, but yes exactly what he said, yet again thank you second person to do my job...And now Ahira lol I have to keep editing my posts lol *sniffs* | |
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Mitsuomi Sensui
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 1:57 pm | |
| It's called Moderate effectiveness lass | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:01 pm | |
| GAH all of you chill im not even done with my character and ur raping me with comments just let me finish please. | |
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Ahira
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:02 pm | |
| -smiles- Then please put WIP in the title of your profile so we don't all maul it like this. When you don't have that in the subject heading, we all think you're finished.
-shrugs and smirks- Just sayin' and a future heads up. | |
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Jack Jaeger
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:06 pm | |
| Well.... I'm done now... so there... | |
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Mitsuomi Sensui
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:12 pm | |
| Alright there lad let me ask you this, 9,000 renown points, how so?...should your limit not be 1,500 until we see your reason to gain it IC?..I don't think thats unreasonable eh lad? You have no missions under your belt or any actions IC so 1,500 renown points it'll have to be, the only reason you have that is because your Sannin, change that one there.
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Jack Jaeger
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Ahira
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| | Subject: Re: Raiden Maru Mon Aug 16, 2010 2:49 pm | |
| This is MUCH better. Any objections? | |
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